Writing Part 1
Practice Essay 3

C1 Advanced Exam

Essay

Here's an example of an essay that you might find on the C1 Advanced Exam.

Try answering the question first, and then check out my answer. I've left my planning and notes for you as well.

The Question

Write your answer in 220-260 words in an appropriate style.

Your class has watched a studio discussion about factors which have contributed to the recent increase in international travel. You have made the notes below:

Factors contributing to the increase in international travel: 

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:

"It's quicker to fly abroad than to take a train to the north of my country!"

"My company has offices in 12 different countries."

"People have developed a love of other cultures through TV and film."

Write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the factors in your notes. You should explain which factor has contributed more to the increase in international travel, providing reasons to support your opinion.

You may make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

Planning

Paragraph 1 - Global Business

Paragraph 2 - Media

Opinion: Media - More people want to travel 


Synonyms - 

international - global, world-wide

global business - e-commerce, international trade

media - mass marketing, mass media, advertising


Change the word form

travel - travelling

international - internationally

increase - increasingly

recent - recently


Paragraph 1 - Global Business - Introductory sentence 

An increase in global trade has create a need for people to travel. 

Tie it back to our key point - Media has had the bigger impact

Paragraph 2 - Media - Introductory sentence

Concrete example or a reason - Lots of people are seeing exotic places online or in advertising, that makes them want to go

Tie it back to our key point - It has had the biggest impact

Example Answer

There is no question that in recent years there’s been an increase in travel world-wide. There are two factors which have greatly contributed to this: the rise of international business and mass media. In particular, the media has been largely responsible for this trend and this essay will explore the reasons for this. 

The increase in international trade and global partnerships has undoubtedly had an impact on the level of travel abroad. As more and more businesses work together, there’s a need for its employees to go overseas and connect in person. However, while this has contributed noticeably to the overall increase in global travel, it can be argued that the media has in fact played a larger role.

Thanks to mass media, such as television, films, advertising, and social media, more and more people have been exposed to the wonders of the world. They have been introduced to the many exotic locations existing globally and, as a result, more people now than ever are inspired to travel to said destinations. Furthermore, this trend impacts not only everyday people, but also businesses as well, as the media also influence the entire travel industry which caters to this shift. Therefore, it’s safe to say that the media has made the hugest impact on the increase in global travel.

In conclusion, while both international business and media have contributed to the rise in international travel, it’s no question that the media has had a huger impact on this trend.

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