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Museums need our support more than anything

How public funding should be allocated is always a major question for decision-makers. It's no question that museums and sports facilities are both essential to creating communities where people have a high quality of life. However, while sports facilities are indeed important, museums should be given priority when distributing funding, for the reasons expressed below.

There’s no question that sporting facilities are hugely important for the health and wellbeing of a community’s citizens. However, due to their popularity among people they already are able to generate significant amounts of funding from outside sources. Corporate advertising and sponsorships already generate large amounts of revenue for these facilities, and as such, they are often not in need of further help. 

On the other hand, museums are needed for preserving culture and heritage, and without them, important educational opportunities would be lost. Unfortunately, due to the nature of their programming, museums are usually unable to benefit from corporate advertising and sponsorships. Instead, they often rely on public donations for support. As this funding is often given directly from individuals instead of companies, it’s much more limited in scope. As a result, they are usually in dire need of government support.

In conclusion, while both sports centres and museums play a vital role within a community, museums should be given priority when determining how to allocate funding, as they often are unable to generate large amounts of funds themselves. 

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